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Hi Annabelle, Your poem is really good i like how it is a poem but it looks like it was book it really paints a picture. i love the fireworks and the art you did. Taylan
Hi annabelle, I love your poem I think it is really good. My favourite part is the very start when you say "Mum and Dad are rushing around the house. I also really like the part about the music. However the end of your poem doesn't quite make sense to me I think you could work on it abit. Over all it is really good and your picture is really good and it relates to the poem very well. Good job! :)
Hi Annabelle, your poem is amazing! The description you used for the music was probably my favourite part, and I like how you have used different sizes of the plants in your drawing :)
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Hi Annabelle, Your poem is really good i like how it is a poem but it looks like it was book it really paints a picture. i love the fireworks and the art you did.
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Hi annabelle, I love your poem I think it is really good. My favourite part is the very start when you say "Mum and Dad are rushing around the house. I also really like the part about the music. However the end of your poem doesn't quite make sense to me I think you could work on it abit. Over all it is really good and your picture is really good and it relates to the poem very well.
ReplyDeleteGood job! :)
Wow Annabelle, I love your poem. I love when you said I am making my favourite dessert.
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Hi Annabelle, your poem is amazing! The description you used for the music was probably my favourite part, and I like how you have used different sizes of the plants in your drawing :)
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the people coming over as if the whole neighbourhood is there.
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